nah, it's not bad but really it needs to be longer imo...
I'm combining
you in my
glass dream system
from gritty mornings to future
it's a project i took on only by free will
(you're all numbers to me)
is this poem worth pursuing?
Though you may have had a message to relay through further writing, I really like it just the way it is.
Yes.
Since it's not done, all I can say for critique is to make sure you get the punctuation in.
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